Feeling Light #FridayFictioneers

He wove the wires around the bolts and turned them once; she jumped.
“What is this? Some sort of flame?” she asked.
He smiled in the strange white light.
“This, my love, is called electricity.” Then he reached into his pocket.
He opened his hand, and she picked up the ring of bright gray metal. She gasped.
“What is this? It’s so light!”
“A ring.” He smiled. “It’s made of aluminum metal.”
“Aluminum..you are so full of surprises,” she murmured, and pulled him close.
“You don’t even have to ask. The answer’s yes!”

———

I return after two weeks!  Better than two years, right?   My wife suggested the idea for this story, but I washed it in my standard post apocalyptic worldfeel.  Anyway…Every Friday, writers from all around the world write 100 word (or thereabouts) flash fiction based on a photo posted that Wednesday on Rochelle Wisoff-Fields’ blog.

I welcome constructive criticism; without it I cannot grow as a writer.  The weekly photo that inspired this story is below:

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About glossarch

The word "glossarch" doesn't exist. At least, not yet. But let's pretend it does for a second. The first part is "gloss," a word that comes to us from Ancient Greek via Latin and English. It means "language." The second part also comes from Ancient Greek and can mean "having power over." So "glossarch" means simply "language controller." So what am I doing making up words? Well, I made up an entire language once. It's called Angosey. So I'm the Glossarch of Angosey. I'm currently a doctorate student in volcano seismology (a branch of geophysics). I enjoy writing fiction and poetry, launching balloons, programming, and hanging out with my lovely wife! Follow me on Twitter! Writing and language creation: @glossarch Balloons and science: @bovineaerospace
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12 Responses to Feeling Light #FridayFictioneers

  1. What a proposal. What a response. What a couple. Great la’ll story, glossarch.

  2. gahlearner says:

    I like postapocalyptic fiction where people don’t go back to the stone age. The rediscovery is great.

  3. Aluminum? What a cheapskate! Surely there’ll still be silver and gold?
    And why would aluminum be dull Gray?
    But now that I’m done nitpicking, it’s a great scene. Infinitely happier than mine.

  4. Dear Danny,

    I was pretty much going to say what Christine did. 😉 Aluminum seems a little chintzy. But perhaps it’s a different world. At least it has a happy ending. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    • glossarch says:

      It is said that Napoleon served his most honored guests with aluminum, since at the time it was more precious than gold itself. This was because the means to make it cheaply had not yet been invented. Granted, in the ruins of our civilization, aluminum would be easy to come by. Then again, so would silver and gold. Maybe just a flaw in my thought process? I’m not sure. I threw it in with Napoleon in mind.

  5. michael1148humphris says:

    This sounds like a world in decay. Yet people somehow carry on. Nice writing.

  6. gravadee says:

    Lovely take on the prompt. I could totally picture this

    Click Here to see what Mrs. Dash Says

  7. Dale says:

    Hey… if aluminum is the way to go in these times, then kudos to him! What a sweet story!

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